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1 The Card on Sat Nov 14, 2009 9:24 pm

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The only thing I ever got off my old man was a birthday card when I was ten. He'd gone off when I was three and left me and mam and my sister to fend for ourselves. Mam never talks about him but my sister remembers him.
'What was dad like?' I ask.
She looks at me through dark, sleepy eyes, pushes her hair back from her eyes. Her arms are scabbed like she's been shinning up a rusty drainpipe and accidentally slid back down and scraped herself. �Whu?'
'I said, what was dad like?'
She smiles at me, and I suss that she's still trippin' and I should ask her later when she's straight.
Anyhow, the only thing I ever got from him was a birthday card when I was ten. It said Happy Birthday Mickey! And then there was a verse inside the card that went:


Now you're ten, and how you've grown
It really won't be long
Til you're a man, and fully grown
With arms both big and strong.

2 Re: The Card on Sat Nov 14, 2009 11:35 pm

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Aww continue please...


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3 Re: The Card on Mon Nov 16, 2009 10:25 pm

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Im Going To Add Tomorrow =][=
If Im Not Tired From My Basketball Game =] !

4 Re: The Card on Mon Nov 16, 2009 10:34 pm

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cant wait...

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5 Re: The Card on Sun Nov 22, 2009 8:45 pm

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I Lost My Freaking Add Shit
But Yea Should I Continue Or No ?

6 Re: The Card on Sun Nov 22, 2009 8:46 pm

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Yes continue...PLEASE


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7 Re: The Card on Fri Dec 18, 2009 5:08 pm

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And on the front of the card was a picture, a cartoon, of a little boy wearing a hardhat and driving a tractor. But I mean, how would he know I'd grown? To be honest, I was surprised he knew where I was, we moved so often.

But the killer was, at the bottom of the card, below the rhyme, he'd added:



Remember, no one's got your back
XX. Dad.




I'd studied this card on more than one occasion, trying to work out some depth to what he was telling me. Laura, what was dad like?'
Three hours later and she's washing up. The dutiful daughter. She looked up a little, thought about my question for a second or two. Then she said, I love him. Still.'
Well I hate him. What was he like, though?'
And she said, 'Stern.'
'Stern, huh?'
I don't mean strict; more like serious. Like you, a bit, but smarter, taller and better looking.' Then she laughed and slapped me across the arm, Dry the dishes,' she said.
It's funny, I learn a lot from my sister, mainly don't do drugs, which I should have written in capital letters instead of italics, but never mind, the thing is, when she's not high or shaking �cos she needs some stuff, she's really smart and, truth be told, she's the core of our family, the strength, believe it or not. Honest, she keeps us together. There's me, fifteen, bright, got a future, they tell me, though I haven't and I'll tell you about that later, and then there's my mam, as honest as, and working, and sensible (though not in her choice of boyfriends or anything) and all that stuff. And then there's Laura. Nineteen, and a junkie, but she holds the family together. Cos mam's a flake and useless, and I, basically, am at a loose end; financially, educationally, socially, morally I won't go on.

Laura has one thing going for her; she's honest. And because she is honest she sees more than most, so she knows more than most, and she holds me and mam together.
Mam.
Hold on, I was told by my English teacher, Miss Wright, that I should show, not tell; too much exposition,' she'll say to me (look it up). So maybe I should stop describing my life, start showing what happens instead, but I'll get to that bit in a bit, so to speak.
Ok, so mam. My mother. She is thirty seven years old and she is a flake. A total dribble. Weak as. They should do a reality TV show on my mam "How Not To "
"How Not To bring up your children."
"How Not To save for the future."
"How Not To get a good job."
"How Not To attract a nice boyfriend."
She did once. Attract a nice boyfriend, that is. And I've read all the women's magazines she buys and I knew from the off it wasn't going to last. From the moment she said to me, �He's kind, thoughtful, good looking. He's got a good job, Pete, and a lovely car' (a bloody good car, since you ask. You didn't? But you would have. A Kompressor. Which means Supercharger. Which also means money. Cool. German. Cool. And much more). But anyway, as she's telling me all this I'm thinking, Yeah, but mam, you're going to fall for a skinheaded nightclub doorman or a carpet salesman called Wayne and you're going to jack Pete in and tell me �there was no spark' which translates as, you think that love equals pain, and affection means distress and you think that being nice is the equivalent of being invisible. Which it kind of is. So just be honest. Please. So, as predicted, Pete went the journey. Kompressor and all. And in moved Marc. Fifteen years younger than mam. What a tosspot.
What a racket.
It was embarrassing. It was the crime that no parent should inflict upon their children! Making those noises. I was twelve, which made Laura sixteen; she'd just failed her exams and was working in Safeway. Very content. Regular money, dreaming about her own flat. Boyfriend. And the last thing that Laura wanted was mam and Marc doing that upstairs halfway through a Sunday afternoon. Go on mam; be a mam, not a flake. Don't be desperate, please. But no. And when Marc made a play for Laura one afternoon, just a suggestion you understand, she screamed the place down and mam came dashing downstairs half-dressed and slapped Laura to shut her up and then slapped her again when she heard what she was accusing Marc of doing.

8 Re: The Card on Fri Dec 18, 2009 5:42 pm

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This is good, girly.
I feel so bad for them.
And I love the way Mickey looks at things, had me rolling about her series of "How not to" books

9 Re: The Card on Fri Dec 18, 2009 9:13 pm

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Lol . Thank You

10 Re: The Card on Fri Dec 18, 2009 10:58 pm

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This is really good,
I like the way you describe everything
and include humour too..
It's very good!
Add more...


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11 Re: The Card on Sun Dec 20, 2009 7:07 pm

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Love the details.
LOVE IT...
Can't wait to hear more
about whats going to happen...
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